ext_19477 ([identity profile] iamstealthyone.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] ultraviolet9a 2007-05-26 10:20 pm (UTC)

I really like the stream of consciousness feel here, how Jo's nervousness comes across so well. And I loved this line:

Then he reaches over and takes the half-finished lollipop lying there in its own sugary near-death experience.

*g*

Nicely done.

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